West Wellington Village- Hoping to grab the attention of on-lookers in the village of WEst WEllington, cyclist Gary Stevens failed to attract any curious on-lookers with his new recumbent bicycle. Stevens donned his Spandex biking shorts to reduce his aerodynamic ride down the busy street at speeds of up to 15km/h. "Rush hour is the best time for people to see me, commuters are stuck in traffic and really have choice but to stare at me." states Stevens who was en route to yoga when interviewed about his bike. Unfortunately the bike failed to attract any interest and even had some people honking madly for Stevens to get out the way. Dejected, Stevens came to a stop at a light and not being familiar with his new bike, toppled over before the light could turn green resulting in minor injuries.
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"Rush hour is the best time for people to see me, commuters are stuck in traffic and really have choice but to stare at me." states Stevens who was en route to yoga when interviewed about his bike.
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"Rush hour is the best time for people to see me, since commuters are stuck in traffic and really have no choice but to stare at me," said Stevens, who was en route to yoga when interviewed about his bike.
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